Three Haiku With Which I Am Not Yet Completely Happy

[gothwalk]

These are from the three parts of the recent European Tour: Drachenwald's Summer Coronation in Germany, the International Medival Congress in Leeds, UK, and Cudgel War in Finland.

Slow-flowing water
Woodsmoke through descending dark
Fireflies in woodland

Words between scholars
Common ground uncovered
Mind overflowing

Dry heat in darkness
Wood and gravel underfoot
Lake water is cold

Comments

[galdrin.livejournal.com]

... but they're yours, correct?

[gothwalk.livejournal.com]

They are. I just feel they could be a little better.

[galdrin.livejournal.com]

Well - I would like to think that *I* got it.

I do love haiku (& tanka) because you have to really think about how to capture that moment of nature you're experiencing, as concise as possible, using only a handful of words.

[aryanhwy.livejournal.com]

I like the IMC one. :)